Friday, April 4, 2008

Oh Rise up and Come

Since everyone seemed to like my last poem, I shall post the other two.
Let me explain that they are nearly the same, sort of one poem in two forms, and I'd like you all to tell me which form you like best. I'm only going to post one of them today, though.
This one, I think, is my favorite...

Oh Rise up and Come

Oh, the times are dark
In our suffering hearts

Worn, weary are we
From press of tyranny

Remnant of the day
That death-sting had its way

Look on that day in sorrow

Oh, rise up and come
Though I know you are numb

We must try again
Though Iverna will rend

For if we succeed,
We at last shall be free

And break the ever-dark tomorrow


Well, there you have it. You'll have to excuse the repetition of the phrase "ever-dark tomorrow"---it is a sort of trademark for Aidelahd. This poem/song/thing is a call for the Draedenai of all seven Kingdoms to gather together and try once more to overthrow the Dictator.
I'll post the other form tomorrow.
Write On!!!
Shelby Marie

15 comments:

Sapphira Adi said...

That was sooo great! You are really talented, in case I haven't mentioned it in the past;) I love all your poems! They rock!

Sapphira

Ian said...

"ever-dark tomorrow" - I think that's a good thing to repeat. We can't be offering our readers any hope, now, can we? :D I meant that, by the way.

That's a good poem! Doesn't stretch on and bore the reader, easy to follow, tougher to interpret...perfect!

:)Ian(:

Araken said...

Awesome! That's such a great poem, just like all the rest you've written.

Elliot Reed said...

Wow, that way great! Your poems are amazing!

~Elliot

Shelby Marie said...

Thanks guys! I wrote that during the last meeting of The Writer's Guild...and I'm quite proud of it, I must say...
Write On!!!
Shelby Marie

Sapphira Adi said...

Shelby, I will be moving sometime next summer in 2009.

Anonymous said...

coooooooool! you're awesome at poetry!

Shelby Marie said...

Next year, Sapphira? Wow, that's awhile...Good luck!
Write On!!!
Shelby Marie

Sapphira Adi said...

Yeah, it is a lot. By the way, have I ever mentioned how talented you are?

Sapphira

Sapphira Adi said...

Yeah, it was really hard on my friend. I'm sorry about your parents, too, Shelby.

Sapphira

ash said...

Shelby your poem was absolutley great, you do alot of great work with your poems keep it up!

***Flinn-fan-of-the-Twins*** said...

Bravo! And I say it again: Bravo! I love your poetry. You are truly gifted!

Sapphira Adi said...

I don't usually say this much to people, but it has just occurred to me how much you guys all mean to me in the YCF. My life would be different without it. To my dear friends in the YCF, I am very glad you guys are my friends:)

Sapphira

Shelby Marie said...

Sapphira--you and the rest of the YCF mean the world to me, too! Y'all are like a second family!

Anonymous said...

Hey, we ARE your family, Shelby! Just not from the same mom and dad.
Ok, I mean we're all brothers and sisters in Jesus! Isn't that just so cool to think that we're all releated in Christ!? I think so anyway!